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Mar 6, 2005 2:52:28 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 6, 2005 2:52:28 GMT -5
and to finish...
The lock of security
His face grows darker As her body stiffens His sweat drips down Onto her cold clammy skin He closes his eyes And gets what he came for Her breathing grows rapid As he reaches his goal She screams and yells Wishing it away He has conquered her body And taken all self respect Even though he has walked out the door She cannot lock him out of her life
well i wont bore you any longer...any feedback would be great, and im happy to keep posting if anyone is interested
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Mar 6, 2005 2:54:17 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 6, 2005 2:54:17 GMT -5
whoops...soz bout the double post!!
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Mar 6, 2005 3:06:04 GMT -5
Post by JoRi on Mar 6, 2005 3:06:04 GMT -5
whoops...soz bout the double post!! you can just deleate the second one if ya want
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Mar 6, 2005 3:10:50 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 6, 2005 3:10:50 GMT -5
k cheers
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Mar 6, 2005 3:17:00 GMT -5
Post by JoRi on Mar 6, 2005 3:17:00 GMT -5
indeed...actually i think i'm banned from using that word, like i'm banned from saying rox my sox
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Mar 6, 2005 3:22:28 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 6, 2005 3:22:28 GMT -5
haha whys that?
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Mar 6, 2005 5:10:16 GMT -5
Post by Um Jammer Lammy on Mar 6, 2005 5:10:16 GMT -5
I enjoyed reading your poems! Just as I thought this thread was dead. Your poem 'Drain' is crazy close to one I wrote a while back called 'Waiting'. The similarity is cool although in saying that they could mean completely different things.
'Waiting'
Angels divided Devils united Hate beyond the eternal Cries heard infernal Tears of poison flow Antidotes no one knows Fire lives for black haze Drink hot water for day upon days Questions are fired Answers must have died There is no one thinking here The unknowable festers near It bares the unbearable Its speaks the unspeakable Mysteries untold Puzzles unfold Seeing parched grass forever Ancient hounds tear at their tether Awake infinity, never in slumber Just me waiting for my number
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Mar 6, 2005 5:16:43 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 6, 2005 5:16:43 GMT -5
yeah i know what you mean about the thread dying...i thought id just post to see if anyone was still interested...
i really liked that poem...im not sure either whether "drain" and yours have the same meaning, but i can say that they definitely brought off the same vibe and atmosphere for me.
and btw, keep the poems flowing if ya like! im always up to read some newies!!
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Mar 6, 2005 5:21:46 GMT -5
Post by Um Jammer Lammy on Mar 6, 2005 5:21:46 GMT -5
Yeah I've been trying to push this thread along a bit since it started. I like to read the new entries. Keep them coming in time!
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Mar 6, 2005 5:46:38 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 6, 2005 5:46:38 GMT -5
Will do...I think there should be a poetry thread where each day someone just writes a verse and adds it....something constant that wont get sidetracked. Oh well, I'm happy with this one for the moment ...keep your poetry coming too, wont ya?
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Mar 15, 2005 4:43:37 GMT -5
Post by Um Jammer Lammy on Mar 15, 2005 4:43:37 GMT -5
Yeah I will, Well I will when I'm not so lazy.
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Mar 20, 2005 7:21:04 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 20, 2005 7:21:04 GMT -5
Just wrote this last night so its a bit rough...
My stalker Paranoid, Prowls through the night, Edging towards my soul, Turning thoughts around.
My acquantance Guilt, Shadows my every move, Hunting me down, Distracting me from me
My enemy Hate, Forever wants to fight, Colliding with my head, Filling me with rage.
My colleague Sad, Drowns me with nonsense, Pulling my levers, Limiting my dreams.
My friend Happy, Relieves me of pain, Her remedies of life, Refresh my mind.
My visitor Fun, Fills the day, The seconds of ecstasy, Erases the memories.
My savior Proud, Helps me when I’m down, I look into her eyes, And find a reason.
My creator Free Lights the tunnel, Diminishing the sorrows, Letting me be me!
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Mar 21, 2005 3:58:01 GMT -5
Post by Um Jammer Lammy on Mar 21, 2005 3:58:01 GMT -5
I like that, I don't think that was too rough, rougher the better I say before self-censorship.
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Mar 21, 2005 4:06:00 GMT -5
Post by Jenno99 on Mar 21, 2005 4:06:00 GMT -5
Thank you...and i guess youre right. i often tamper with things i have just written, and later on I end up sticking with what I initially wrote. So feeling unlazy enough to post some poems?
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Mar 21, 2005 4:12:26 GMT -5
Post by Um Jammer Lammy on Mar 21, 2005 4:12:26 GMT -5
This is my favourite, its prolly not the best but I just like what it is.
'Fly Pegasus'
No one can catch us We leave no trace Only you I trust Pegasus creature of grace
To Pluto and Beyond Fly me Pegasus To are secret garden with a pond Away from the masses
We’ll fly forever We won’t ever fight We weigh like a feather We are faster than light
We’ll traverse every sky Fly me Pegasus Where people don’t cry To only friendly faces
We’ll fly through dreams We’ll have a million eternal sleeps Oblivious to the screams The world plays for keeps
Nowhere is to far Fly me Pegasus To each and every star We’ll be our own circus
Anywhere we’ll go Fly me Pegasus As long as it’s more than a stones throw Certainty is my nemesis
We’ll fly tomorrow We will be infinity As long as yesterday doesn’t follow But today, for now, it’s just me.
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